revise a essay about performance

Hi. Mr./Ms

This essay was done and be graded.

The specific requirement is attached below. The comment and grade are in the bottom of this essay.

Please based on those two to revise this essay achieve a higher grade.

and if you have any questions please dont hesitated to ask me

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