research paper revision 1

I have a research paper about Pollution and Global Warming in the US, and I didn’t get a good grade on it.

I need someone who could fix it and make it a strong and good research paper.

My instructor said:

What is your thesis?

I’m unsure of your organization here. The first two pages seems to just be background info, and nothing that’s making a strong argument yet.

Most of this is just a summary of information, and not really a strong argument. How can you include more of a personal argument in this paper?

I have attached my research and a revision document.

I NEED HELP!!